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  • Posted by ScottishLaura 3 years ago. There are 37 posts. The latest reply is from caitiebug16.
  1. OK, so this time it isn't actually a fanfic at all... Except Lena is in it, 'cause she is in all of my stories Just bear in mind that it's not the same Lena as I write into the HIVE fanfics. More or less completely different, except for the name. I've written in down on paper at the moment, so I'mma work on getting it up here soonish. I'll give you a quick intro now, though

    "In a world without dark, there is no evil,
    In a world without light, there is no light,
    In a world without colour, all things fade to grey,
    In a world without hope there is only day and night."

    That was all I ever used to hear. Radio, TV, Computers, until soon enough it echoed through my head continually. No one ever thought anything of it, we all thought it was some computer glitch or something.

    One person in our street saw through it. Dr. Munroe saw it coming. He tried to warn us. No one listened.

    The poem showed up last month. It was a dark, rainy Tuesday, and everyone ignored it. I was freaked out at first. Poems, particularly ones this dark, didn't just appear from nowhere and fade to nothing. There was always something behind it. After a few days, nothing out of the ordinary happened, so the poem slipped to the back of my mind, and I continued life as normal. Until yesterday.

  2. Seams awesome so far! nice mysterious start. Looking forward to the next(hopefully) update.

  3. Oh, don't worry Mally, I'll update it soon Just about finished typing what I've written so far. And you win a free lollipop ( O- ) for being the first to comment

  4. Yay! Lolipops

  5. Uh, Mally, wrong thread, maybe???

  6. Yeah.
    Opps. I'll delete it. Dang.

  7. Haha, it's cool

  8. Hmm. More soon? I hope.

  9. Yeah. It's on it's way from my exercise book to my laptop

  10. Nice. Intriguing

  11. Yay.

    Btw, Emily, check your email yet?

  12. Uhmm.. I have now

  13. ERmm.. Which character are you picking?

  14. "In a world without dark, there is no evil,
    
In a world without day, there is no light,
    
In a world without colour, all things fade to grey,

    In a world without hope there is only day and night."

    That was all I ever used to hear. Radio, TV, Computers, until soon enough it echoed through my head continually. No one ever thought anything of it, we all thought it was some computer glitch or something.
    One person in our street saw through it. Dr. Munroe saw it coming. He tried to warn us. No one listened.
    The poem showed up last month. It was a dark, rainy Tuesday, and everyone ignored it. I was freaked out at first. Poems, particularly ones this dark, didn't just appear from nowhere and fade to nothing. There was always something behind it. After a few days, nothing out of the ordinary happened, so the poem slipped to the back of my mind, and I continued life as normal. Until yesterday.

    January 5th 2715

    It was literally a normal day. I went to school in the morning, studied at a friends house in the afternoon, and came here. I had thought that something weird was going on in the morning. The moment I put my contacts in, I could see an inky, black cloud spreading across the sky. I shrugged the thought away. Occasionally the biosphere around the Earth opened partially to let some of the deadly gases from the atmosphere. I had no idea how it worked, it just did. What I didn’t realise, though, was that it was moving, spreading. Fast. As I left the house in the morning, walking past Doctor Munroe’s house, I called out.
    “Morning, Doc.” I could see him in his study, looking anxiously at the computer. I shrugged. He wasn’t exactly sane these days. I saw my friends waiting for me at the end of the street, and I jogged over to them.
    “We missed the bus again.” I rolled my eyes.
    “I’m sure you did.” They smiled. “Aren’t you just using me to get free transport everywhere?” They all grinned sheepishly. But one person spoke up.
    “Dude, just ‘cause your dad is the Pilot for Transport these days doesn’t mean that we’re using you.” I stepped forwards, folded arms and raised eyebrow. “Oh, who am I kidding?” I grinned, letting my arms relax. The one that was brave enough to speak up was my best friend, Lena. When we were younger, we did everything together. We still did. She stepped to my side, and I wrapped my arms around her in a hug. One of my other close friends, Charles, wolf whistled.
    “Shut up, Charlie. You know Lena and I are tight.” He winked.
    “Besides,” Lena pitched in, “What happened to your girlfriend? Tina, wasn’t she?” He frowned slightly.
    “Well… Uh…” I grinned at Charlie, “Why aren’t you two going out?” He asked. “Everyone would be so happy.” I rolled my eyes.
    “’Cause that’d be like going out with my freaking sister.” Lena laughed.
    “Yeah, Charlie, I’d just give up.”
    “Whatever.”
    “Yo, Andy, you gonna keep me waiting?” I turned around to see the bus behind us, doors opened, Max, the bus driver, grinning at us.
    “Not any more, no.”
    “Free rides again today, Andy?”
    “Don’t tell Dad.”
    “My lips are sealed.”
    “Love you Maxie.”
    “Love you too, Andy.” We all piled on the bus, dragging schoolbags behind us. As everyone chatted again, I looked out the window. The cloud was still there.
    “Biosphere open today, Max?” I called out. Max had been one of the designers, before he was discredited.
    “Shouldn’t be. Why you see it?”
    “Yeah, just behind the bus.” He looked in his mirrors.
    “I don’t see nothing.”
    “Yeah, what the heck are you on about?”
    “Can’t you guys see it?” They shook their heads.
    “Andy, are you OK?” Lena watched me, a worried look on her face.
    “Fine.” I muttered. “Just fine.” She smiled sadly, reaching for my hand. It was at that moment though, much to my dismay, that we reached our stop. She stood up, looking away. I sighed, and stood up, stepping off the bus.
    “Later, Max.”

    School passed uneventfully. Extremely uneventfully. When I was walking along the road with Lena to her house to study, because my dad worked late and I had to hang out with Lena until he got home, I noticed her limping.
    “Are you OK?” She nodded.
    “Fine.”
    “You’re limping.”
    “What?” She tried to cover up. “No I’m not.” I frowned, stepped towards her.
    “Yes you are. What happened?” She shrugged.
    “Nothing bad.” I reached for her hand, before seeing bruised knuckles and scratches.
    “Who was it today?” She shrugged.
    “Just some people.”
    “Lena,” I let her hand slide away, and I reached for her waist. “Come on, just tell me who.”
    “The same guys as last week. OK?” I nodded.
    “OK. I just wanted to know.” She smiled sadly.
    “I’m sorry I snapped at you.” I gently hugged her.
    “It’s OK. I understand. Let’s get back to your place.” She nodded, and I helped her slowly limp her way back to he house. We stepped in the front door. Fortunately, Lena’s parent’s weren’t home yet, either. We took our school bags off our backs, and I sat her down on the couch. I smiled at her, but she couldn’t smile back. She began to sob gently.
    “Shhh, Lena, it’s OK.” A shudder rand through her, and I slid my arm around her waist, pulling her towards me. Her head rested gently on my shoulder, and I let her arms slide around my waist, too. I gently rubbed her back until her sobbing subsided.
    “You all done?” I whispered. She nodded.
    “Thanks.” I smiled. I let my head rest on top of hers until she looked up. She was watching me, so I looked over to her.
    “Are you sure you’re alright?” She nodded, and smiled sadly.

    That was when everything changed. The inky, black cloud that I had blocked out of my vision for the entire day suddenly took over all of my vision. I jumped in shock, and falling to the floor, crashed into the coffee table.
    “Andy!” I assumed she jumped to her feet, and sat me up. “Andy, are you OK?”
    “I can’t see anything!” I cried. “Everything's gone black!”
    “Andy, what are you talking about?” Lena sounded almost as panicked as me.
    “The cloud. It’s taking over. The Doc was right.”
    “The Darkness?” She whispered.
    I nodded, suddenly scared.

    “It’s here.”

    ((Anyways, this is like, my second re-write of this chapter. I'd written it in my head, but I decided to change the direction of the storyline to see how it goes What do you all think?? ))

  15. Duh duhh duhhhhhh!

    Goshies, love it, Scottie. *Hugs for awesomeness*

  16. Haha, thanks Tora *hugs*

  17. Drools. Can I say.......awesome. Romance, mystery, and possibly action. What more can I ask for? Other than robots, but that's my robot madness coming on again. *bashes robot madness back into a box.

  18. Hey, this is set in 2715. Who says there aren't robots, yet??

  19. *Ducts tapes up robot madness box* Like Grease. Oh wait, does the story have fast car chases?

    *Cough* Mally, check the RP thread *Cough*

  20. *pouts* hey, That was MY robot madness box.

  21. As previously stated, it's set in 2715. I'm yet to think about what happens with all the technology (yay for going with the flow) but yeah

    And my parents are making me sleep now. I'll ponder this technological advancement age in my sleep

  22. Nighty Nighty, Scottie. Sweet Technological Advanced Dreams.

  23. Hehe. Sweet dreams Scottie!

  24. Its amazing, Scottie Night, haha

  25. YAY! Aother awesome fanfic to read! I love it so far Scottie!

  26. Awesome, Scottie. Keep going with it. I like.

  27. Haha, thanks guys

  28. Whoa. Whoa. Whoa.

    This is scary. I think you've stuffed with my brain. It's so believable.

  29. Mwhahahahahahahahaha

    Oh, and FYI, guys, I've published this on fictionpress.net if you want to read it there

    http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2893427/1/

  30. Keep writing
    Keep writing
    Keep writing

    please?

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